John Kerry needs an editor, STAT

From Foreign Policy Fri Feb 1 2013, 17:31:58

It's probably not the most important thing in the world. But I feel duty-bound to point out that the new bio for Secretary of State John Kerry, posted this afternoon on the department's website, needs work.

Two parts are particularly problematic. The first is this terrible, endless sentence in the seventh paragraph:

As a Senator, Kerry served since 2009 as the Senate Foreign Relations Committee Chairman where he became a Senate leader on key foreign policy and national security issues facing the United States including Afghanistan and Pakistan, nuclear nonproliferation, and global climate change, building on his previous Senate work that included helping to expose the Iran-Contra scandal and leadership on global AIDS.

Next, there's the double use of "best-selling" to describe Kerry's books and the questionable use of the word "which":

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